The rope marks on her skin were like smoke, barely seen across the breakfast table. His breath quickened with the memory of her submission.
The rope marks on her skin were like smoke, barely seen across the breakfast table. His breath quickened with the memory of her submission.
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Nice set up. The end fell a bit flat/too expected or obvious.
The smoke metaphor could have been leveraged better with something like “the space between them thick with memories of her restraint.”
A potent story, although I thought the title gave it away too early.
I really liked this one. It was saucy without being overly explicit.
I thought this was very clever. It definately leaves the imagination open.
Maybe I have a dirty mind, but without looking at the title I would of thought they had a kinky evening. I enjoyed this one more than “He Thinks/She Thinks”
I enjoyed this one very much. The imagery of the smoke around her wrist is very powerful, although I do agree, the title gives the theme away too quick. I think that the title needs more ambiguity.
I like it. All the way. From title to ending beat. Well done!
Very sexy! Well done!
Thank you for the kind words and suggestions. 🙂
Why does this have be male pov and dom. Don’t we all submit in play? Why not an inclusive “our” replacing every possessive pronoun?
No, we don’t all submit in play; submission, by its very definition, requires there to be a dominant partner otherwise there’s no-one to submit TO.
Using ‘our’ instead of ‘his’ or ‘her’ would put both partners on an equal footing, deleting the value of submission and though in a D/s relationship both are of equal VALUE, the dom and sub have vastly different roles.
/soapbox