“Take her out!” Jules was told. So he did. It was a nice clean shot too. But then his boss phoned to ask if his wife was having a good time.
“Take her out!” Jules was told. So he did. It was a nice clean shot too. But then his boss phoned to ask if his wife was having a good time.
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Ha, I enjoyed this – made me smile.
Clever! The risk in doing any humorous microfiction piece is that it can read like a self-contained gag, rather than a story, in its own right.
In this case, the writer made it work. I got a sense that Jules is somebody who takes pride in what he does, no matter how unpleasant. And I actually felt that lump-in-my-throat “oh crap” sensation, when I got to the ‘punchline’. It seemed like Jules just wanted to do a fine job. And the reader KNOWS it’s not gonna end well for him.
Thanks 🙂
Oops. For some people, you have to be super clear. LOL! Nice story, Ben 🙂
Good one! Very easy to visualize.