On his deathbed, a father that had abandoned me asked for stories of my childhood and his grandchildren. In my anger, I told him everything.
On his deathbed, a father that had abandoned me asked for stories of my childhood and his grandchildren. In my anger, I told him everything.
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Your few words say so much. Well done.
Maya,
All critiques are welcome, of course. How would you handle implying the relationship between them? Thanks in advance for any suggestions you may have.
Rob
Hmm, sounds like the father got an earful! Good job! I would try to imply the abandonment rather than telling it directly. (Yes, I know it is easy to offer critique to others. :))
Your small story deftly describes the strong emotions of abandonment and of revenge. A very powerful tale.
Very well done. You gave us a whole world in 140 characters – multiple emotions and feelings. Great job!
Thanks for those great comments, and for reading the story.